Question Pertaining to Grammar (adverb use)

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  1. Chuck C

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    Which sentence sounds best:

    The climate of the contemporary workplace is changing dramatically.

    The climate of the contemporary workplace is dramatically changing.
     
  2. Patrick Sun

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    I like the first one. Neither is wrong, though.
     
  3. Jon_Gregory

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    The difference between the two is whether you want to put more emphasis on the word changing or dramatically. With the first one, it makes the word changing stand out more. In the second, the word dramatically stands out more.
     
  4. Glenn Overholt

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    The first one. I don't know what is what in grammar, but it is the workplace that is changing. The extras should follow.

    Glenn
     
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    Dammit, I can't find my grammar police manual, but I don't think you can separate "is changing".
     
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    Separating them is fine as far as I know. You may be thinking of splitting infinitives. For example, if it were "to change" some think it would be wrong to place the adverb before the verb.

    More info: http://www.bartleby.com/68/76/5676.html
     
  7. Chuck C

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    thanks for the replies...



    jon.. your reply def. clarifies the issue (i.e. where to put emphasis). I'm going w/ sentence #1
     
  8. Seth Paxton

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    To add on to the advice so far, I think the key here is understanding what your audience already knows. If your point is that the reader will be surprised to know that things are changing then it comes first for the emphasis.



    However, if it is a case where you think the reader already somewhat understands that change is taking place, then putting dramatically first is probably better because your point to them isn't that there is change but that there is dramatic change.
     
  9. Nathan Eddy

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    I don't think it's a matter of emphasis as much as it is style. The last word in the sentence should be powerful and vivid. You don't want to end on a weak note. Sentences, paragraphs, and stories should all build to the climax. "Changing" is not nearly as exciting as "dramatically."
     
  10. Yee-Ming

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    To me, I'd say the first version, but what do I know?



    Where's Rex Bachman, the grammar expert of HTF?
     
  11. Stacey

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    I like the first line also. I always find that given two words, people almost always put the word with fewer sylibals first followed by the longer sylibal words.



    Take for example, two names like Veronica and Betty...people always seem to put Betty first then Veronica because of the ammount of sylibals.



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  12. DaveGTP

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    I don't see anything wrong with either one.



    Seems like a matter of style, and where you want the emphasis.
     

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