Need help with an essay.

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  1. Dome Vongvises

    Dome Vongvises Lead Actor

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    Essay removed.
     
  2. Justin Lane

    Justin Lane Cinematographer

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    In general, I would say you need to expand on the points you make about yourself. For example, just don't say you feel you have integrity, but give examples that show why you are a person of integrity.

    It looks like you have all of the basic points that you want to impart in the essay, but are lacking detail. Most applying probably are using the same general ideas that you are trying to impart. Right now your essay is very generic. It is up to you to add the details necessary to make you appear as a unique individual and stand out from the crowd.

    J
     
  3. Grant B

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    I guess saying something about getting kicks seeing people in those paper night gowns is not good
    But doctors need to have humor too!
     
  4. TheoGB

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    Oh, very good, Grant!! [​IMG]
     
  5. Thomas_Moolasat

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    Dome, I would be cautious that you should put your essay on this forum. What if someone uses in a way without your permission?
     
  6. Thi Them

    Thi Them Producer

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    Is there a length requirement? I agree with what Justin said about expanding on your points.

    The opening sentence doesn't really grab me.

    "I can become the best doctor I can be"--this seems redundant to me.

    ~T
     
  7. Dome Vongvises

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