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Discussion in 'After Hours Lounge (Off Topic)' started by MarcusUdeh, Nov 15, 2004.

  1. MarcusUdeh

    MarcusUdeh Supporting Actor

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    Since I love poetry I thought I would start a thread in the after hours section. Members can add their own poems and critique *constructive criticism* please I do not want this thread closed anytime soon.
     
  2. MarcusUdeh

    MarcusUdeh Supporting Actor

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    Joseph
    October 14, 2003

    There would not be a moment
    To guess

    Just be in the feeling
    Oh what a cold one it is
    And though it’s curiously new
    I never thought the
    Other side would under

    Stand

    Marcus Udeh ©2003
     
  3. Artur Meinild

    Artur Meinild Screenwriter

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    This is a song lyric, but I guess it goes anyway...


    As I lay, down with you
    Everything is fading out of time and space
    All is gray, not a hue
    Coming to a desperate start

    On the way, holding true
    Everyone can see the hope upon his face
    He will stay, and imbue
    Power in the desperate heart


    ©2004 Artur Meinild [​IMG]
     
  4. shaniceMW

    shaniceMW Stunt Coordinator

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    i love jill scott who is a lyricist and a poet. i have poems of my own that i will post later, but this is jill's that i love.

    Met him on a thursday,sunny afternoon
    Cumulus clouds, 84 degrees
    He was brown,deep
    Said he wanted to talk about my mission
    Listen to my past lives (Word?)
    Took me on long walks to places where butterflies rest easy
    Talked about Moses and Mumia
    Reparations,blue colors,memories of shell topped adidas
    He was fresh,like summer peaches
    Sweet on my mind like block parties and penny candy
    Us was nice and warm,no jacket,no umbrella,just warm
    At night we would watch the stars
    And he would pyhsically give me each and every one
    I felt like cayenne pepper,red,hot,spicy
    I felt Dizzy, Sonya, heaven, and Miles between my thighs
    Better than love,we made delicious
    He me had,had me he
    He made me tongue tied
    I could hear his rhythm in my thoughts
    I was his sharp, his horn section
    His boom and his bip
    And he was my love

    Love rain down on me,on me,down on me

    The rain was fallin and,and slowly and sweetly and stinging my eyes
    And I could not see that he became my voodoo priest
    And I was his faithful concubine
    Wide open,wide,loose like bowels after collard greens
    The mistake was made
    Love slipped from my lips
    Dripped down my chin and landed in his lap
    And us became new
    Now me non-clairvoyant and in love
    Made the coochie easy and the obvious invisible
    The rain was falling
    And I couldn't see the season changing
    And the vibe slipping off it's axis
    Our beautiful melody became wildly staccato
    The rain was falling and I could not see
    That I was to be plowed and sowed and fertilized
    And left to drown in his sunny afternoon
    Cumulus clouds,84 degrees,melody
     
  5. MarcusUdeh

    MarcusUdeh Supporting Actor

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    Question: Are those that have already posted young people?

    *I just came to the realization that only a young person could start a thread like this in an off topic section of a Home Theater Forum*
     
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    Ricardo C Producer

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    Why, exactly?
     
  7. MikeSerrano

    MikeSerrano Second Unit

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    Random Thoughts
    Saturday, July 26th, 2003 at 12:44am

    Sometimes I hold my breath when I listen to you.
    I want to be the one to save you, but I don't want you to be the type that needs saving.
    As much as I tried to stop it, I've changed. We all have; though I tried to stop that too.
    I try too hard, when I try at all.

    Nothing is coming together, and I know I am to blame.
    I have always pushed people away. And I push harder immediately before I can get hurt.

    Why do so many of us not care? There is so much pain, I suppose it's easier to just focus on our own.
    Try not to be disappointed.

    Why aren't new memories as vivid as they were when we were children? Why doesn't it feel like Christmas anymore?

    I went from pop rock to hip-hop then stopped.
    Then on to hard-rock, indie-rock, indie-pop to punk (pop).
    Don't forget drums and bass
    (a two-year phase)
    and that stint with techno in the late eighties.

    Where can I go to just have fun? I'm tired of trying to have fun.
    For the love of something or was it just for the fun?

    Or was it just to forget?

    ©2003 Michael Serrano
     
  8. MikeSerrano

    MikeSerrano Second Unit

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    Meh... I'm not so happy with my last writing now that I see it up on the screen. Hopefully, this will get the bad taste out of my mouth:

    Darkness of Days

    The one thing you are accustomed to
    is the thing I despise.
    The one thing you count on
    brings our demise.
    The one thing that you cannot stand
    is my way.
    The one thing that brings you here
    drives me away.
    The one thing that is the same for you
    is different for me.
    The one thing that you cannot hear
    I am able to see.

    When we come together
    we go our separate ways.
    You make light out of night
    and I, darkness of days.

    Put the gun of your hate to my head
    pull my trigger.
    As our time grows smaller
    my rage grows bigger.
    I only find you when you're gone;
    I miss you when you're here.
    Your explanations are long;
    your excuses, all too clear.

    The one thing you do not notice
    is only my whole life.
    The one thing that's harmless to you
    cuts me like a knife.
    The one thing you cannot explain
    I easily decode.
    The one thing that calms you down
    makes me explode.
    The one thing you do not see
    is apparent to all.
    The only thing we can agree upon
    is the spring and the fall.

    When we come together
    we go our separate ways.
    You make light out of night
    and I, darkness of days.

    ©2004 Michael Serrano
     
  9. Rob Gardiner

    Rob Gardiner Cinematographer

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    HTF HAIKU

    Part one of many

    Re-issued WOLF MAN
    Universal double dips
    Can I afford it?

    New DR. STRANGELOVE
    Grover Crisp restored this film
    He did a fine job

    MARRIED WITH CHILDREN
    Released without its theme song
    Frank spins in his grave

    Discs with no inserts
    How to find the chapter stops?
    I'll use the menu

    Dolby Digital
    Truly worse than DTS?
    No one knows for sure

    Jerry Lewis film
    VISIT TO A SMALL PLANET
    Why is it not out?

    Marcus' signature
    Changes quicker than the tides
    Now it's a hippo

    [​IMG]
     
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    Rob Gardiner Cinematographer

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    More HTF Haiku

    Part two of several

    I lived in a town
    UKIAH, California
    Haiku spelled backwards

    Gilliam's BRAZIL
    Criterion Collection
    An all-time favorite

    Failed experiment
    Doc Ock goes on a rampage
    My subwoofer shakes

    Star Wars: A New Hope
    Why does Lucas change his films?
    Han Solo fired first

    CEO Eisner
    Don't let the door hit your ass
    When you leave Disney

    Cinerama films
    Able, Baker, Charlie booths
    Better than Imax

    THE INCREDIBLES
    Too much violence for the kids?
    Let them watch Barney

    RAH restored
    LAWRENCE OF ARABIA
    David Lean's best film

    Blu-Ray from Sony
    I predict a great success
    Just like Betamax

    [​IMG]
     
  11. Garrett Lundy

    Garrett Lundy Producer

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    HTF Haiku yet again!

    SILICA
    Grainy white powder
    silica is not candy
    it absorbs moisture

    Region Coding
    Many extra features
    deluxe collectors box set
    only works in France

    Shyne
    You cannot have him
    I will keep him for myself
    don't be sore loser

    Antonio Show
    Antonio show
    tries to pick up the girl
    forgot if he did

    Cthulhu
    Julie K meddles
    in affairs of elder gods
    ia ia fhtagn!

    BOSE
    videostage five
    and ADAPTI-Q system
    it still sounds like shit
     
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    HTF Haiku

    Part three of not nearly enough

    Snapper or keepcase
    Since I use slimline jewels
    I could not care less

    Walt Disney Treasures
    Lots of great classic cartoons
    Wish there was "play all"

    ENTERPRISE is weak
    Berman and Braga are gone
    But the show still sucks

    SEINFELD coming soon
    George is humiliated
    "I was in the pool!"

    Stanley Kubrick films
    Yes, that is their OAR
    Please go read the FAQ

    Someone at Sony
    Got their hands on Photoshop
    Covers look like crap
     
  13. Cameron Yee

    Cameron Yee Executive Producer
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    The previous Movie Haiku thread was great fun, but shortlived. Come 2005 I am planning to do a variation of a list of the movies I watch, but rather than keep a list write a haiku for each of them.
     
  14. Aurel Savin

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    wrote this a few months ago ...


    Potting Soil


    searching the seas of hope
    looking for a visual distraction
    a different reaction ...
    a common thread
    so you no longer ...
    dread coming back

    when will you realize
    that man is the same everywhere ...
    a tough skinned beast
    hiding a porcelain heart

    the thoughts ..
    under layers of tacos, teriyaki and tika
    are there with you ... always with you
    in the belly of the beast

    fall from the sky
    sink down below
    bury your head and steer your tears

    age and knowledge can increase
    but the tenderness ... the human heart
    is still in single digits
    ... for all ...

    come full circle
    turn red, turn blue, turn yellow
    but green is within your root ...
    hope is within your blood
     
  15. Rob Gardiner

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    David Hasslehoff
    Poses with his friend Gary
    KITT should mow them down

    Rutger Hauer broods
    The Reverend Doctor Zen Dogg
    Sure loves BLADE RUNNER
     
  16. Rob Gardiner

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    Buy a Skip Doctor
    Repair all your damaged discs
    Where's my green marker?
     
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    MikeSerrano

    I liked both of yours (even the one you didn't like). Very angst-y/dark [​IMG] .

    I will continue to lurk here and read. Not much of a poet myself. If I was writing it would be fantasy novels. [​IMG] But I don't mind reading poetry.
     
  18. Drew Bethel

    Drew Bethel Screenwriter

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    Jus wakin' up in da mornin' gotta thank God
    I dunno, but today seems kinda odd
    No Barkin' from the dog, no smog
    And mama's cookin' breakfast with no hog.
     
  19. Kenneth

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    Here's one I wrote in high school English class. My sonnet was inspired by The Crystal Cave:

    When the Autumn cometh, and the Winter snow
    And the trees are barren, and the frightful cold
    Makes the landscape glisten, when the wind does blow
    Then I will return, like so oft of old.
    From the bowels of the Earth, from Hell itself
    From the fiery regions, that are my home
    And into the light, like a fiery elf
    To live like a man, and not a gnome.
    Yes my love dearest, at last I have come
    Through the black night, on the breath of a breeze
    And of our love, all musicians will strum
    Because of the Love, that no mortal can sieze.
    So come with me dearest, to my fair domain
    And never more suffer, from love's bitter pain.

    You can't tell I was a D&D player then also [​IMG]

    Kenneth
     
  20. george kaplan

    george kaplan Executive Producer

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    I write a lot of lyrics/poems, but they tend to be political protest in nature, so most of them I couldn't post without violating forum rules.
     

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