David Lawson
Screenwriter
A couple of things in the Computers and HTPC Area description on the main page:
If you didn't have a computer, you would not be here...
This is nitpicking, and quite possibly offends my personal style alone, since I can't find a reference to it in any of my grammar books. I personally would use either didn't...wouldn't or did not...would not, rather than using a contraction in one instance but not the other. Jack, I'm sure, will correct me if I'm wrong.
As PCs become more and more powerful, their capability also grows, one the side benefits...
I would change the comma after grows to a semicolon, and add of: one of the side benefits...
Also, this part of the Video Game Hardware description has always bugged me:
Here is where you can talk about the latest in video game hardware/systems from PlayStation2, X-Box, Nintendo, Sega, etc.
PlayStation 2 and X-Box aren't the companies making the systems (like Nintendo and Sega are); they're the systems themselves. It should therefore be systems from Sony, Microsoft, Nintendo, Sega, etc.
On second thought, put Sega first.
Still on the prowl...
If you didn't have a computer, you would not be here...
This is nitpicking, and quite possibly offends my personal style alone, since I can't find a reference to it in any of my grammar books. I personally would use either didn't...wouldn't or did not...would not, rather than using a contraction in one instance but not the other. Jack, I'm sure, will correct me if I'm wrong.
As PCs become more and more powerful, their capability also grows, one the side benefits...
I would change the comma after grows to a semicolon, and add of: one of the side benefits...
Also, this part of the Video Game Hardware description has always bugged me:
Here is where you can talk about the latest in video game hardware/systems from PlayStation2, X-Box, Nintendo, Sega, etc.
PlayStation 2 and X-Box aren't the companies making the systems (like Nintendo and Sega are); they're the systems themselves. It should therefore be systems from Sony, Microsoft, Nintendo, Sega, etc.
On second thought, put Sega first.
Still on the prowl...
